Hi Tupua, my name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Great work! I really liked your persuasive writing, I love the way that you have been able to put in three main points and add in lot's of details.
I like working at school better too. I definitely agree with your points. I also think I learn better when I am able to ask my teachers or friends questions easier. What is your favorite thing about school?
To improve, maybe you could make the writing bigger, it's a bit small and I am not entirely sure exactly how it got that small. Maybe you could put it into a slide with the three points on each slide, that may help.
Hi Tupua, my name is Mia from Yaldhurst Model School. Great work! I really liked your persuasive writing, I love the way that you have been able to put in three main points and add in lot's of details.
ReplyDeleteI like working at school better too. I definitely agree with your points. I also think I learn better when I am able to ask my teachers or friends questions easier. What is your favorite thing about school?
To improve, maybe you could make the writing bigger, it's a bit small and I am not entirely sure exactly how it got that small. Maybe you could put it into a slide with the three points on each slide, that may help.
Amazing work!
Mia